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December 11, 2011

BuddhaRocks Project: Day 1

Why resist my quenching rain?
I know you thirst; it’s very plain

One kiss would make things okay
You’re tight-lipped and turn away

I held back too many years
Now my rain turns into tears


23 comments:

  1. Rain, when turned into tears oh how sad... yet i love the deepness of your verse
    Hi!
    :-)

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  2. aw - snooze and lose, I guess. pretty pictures

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  3. what a great take on these tulips- clever and thoughtful.

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  4. Just wonderful. Haven't we all felt that. Lucky flower gets quenched.

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  5. Ah yes! those Two-Lips don't want to open up do they?

    Nice piece.

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  6. o man! pretty flowers un-thirsty yet one thirsting for more, what a juxtaposition, a tease really! :)
    happy rally!!
    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/14/discomfort/

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  7. my rain turns into tears, so sad

    http://zongrik.wordpress.com/2011/12/09/nano-informatics/

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  8. Beautiful yet sad at the same time.

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  9. The pictures really add to the poem ... awesome verse. Who doesn't relate to being closed off to the offer of help? To being afraid of being vulnerable? I know I do...

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  10. I love the double negative. The twice rejected. You stay with it. Smart and clever. You know I relish that kind of tension. You stay right in the pocket per se. We've both written a piece incorporating the "tear." I feel your pain man, I feel your pain.

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  11. Beautiful, Bubba. I like what you've done with the pictures. Great pictures, by the way.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/14/a-thousand-candles/

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  12. Awesome metaphor--you used tulips also--nice :)

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  13. nice take on tulips...thanks for sharing...

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  14. This is just beautiful. You owe me several pennies, by the way.

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  15. A gorgeous metaphor, I didn't realise the picture was a prompt before reading the comments. Your poem makes perfect sense now, and I really enjoyed it.

    http://halfwaybetweenthegutter.wordpress.com/2011/05/16/late-night-cafe/

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  16. oh! gosh! how well explained emotions in such simple words.. nice imagery as well..lovely...Thanks for share...

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  17. Such a sadness, tears becoming rain. Happy rally

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  18. Beautiful images and great take on them.

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  19. I like the metaphor of quenching thirst with a kiss. Nicely done.

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  20. I read deep regret in those lines, though you have not stated it...simplicity that is poignant!
    Rosie

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