I feel the heat
Each time that we meet
She stokes that flame
When she calls out my name
I start to smolder
Every time that I hold her
I hear it start hissing
Whenever we start kissing
I feel the burn
As we both start to yearn
I feel the fire
Overcome by desire
smoking...got a little fire in mine as well...keep it stoked man!
ReplyDeleteBaby keep that fire going... Must be cold in MI!!!
ReplyDeleteHappy weekend
Tight lyrical lines and the rhymes are dead on. Think I might "borrow" this 55 for my next Valentines Day card. lol Awesome.
ReplyDeleteSmoking! Loved this 55!
ReplyDeleteI'll stop and listen
ReplyDeletewhen I hear the hissin'.
'Cuz for Pete's sake
it just could be a snake.
As long as I'm alive
I've read nary a finer 55.
keep the heat up.
ReplyDeletewow.
This sounds like a love ballad from the 60's.
ReplyDeleteBubba and the Bobbleheads...
Most excellent 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
love that, Bubba and the Bobbleheads!
ReplyDeleteor Bubbleheads. or Rubbernecks. or, ah, never mind.
yay!
Wow! That's chemistry!
ReplyDeleteNice! To keep feeling that desire is wonderful.
ReplyDeleteOooo. I'm blushing!
ReplyDeletePut some beats behind that rhyme! Tight! And smokin'! Great job.
ReplyDeletehummmmm hawt and nice and easy to read- love the rhyme and that desire of yours... Eric!
ReplyDelete:)
Overcome by desire - Time for me to go home to my wife! Well done.
ReplyDeleteRockets and Wings is my 55 this week.
Ah! the desires and the acts leading to it .. lovely write ..
ReplyDeletehows ya doing ... I know i been away from this place for quite a time ..
Like Ami said, give that a beat!
ReplyDeleteOooo, Baby. You DO have a way with words. I love how you get right to the heart of matters. Your poem-song could be a freaking #1 hit -- I swear!!
ReplyDeletexoxo
Beat, beat, beat... and here I was thinking it couldn't be beat - LOL!
ReplyDeleteI'll sing it if somebody plays the melody for me.
blushing...
ReplyDeletewhat a sweet 55.
well done plots.
Whoohooo! Hot one!
ReplyDeleteWwhhheeeww! Hot and sensuous!! I heard the drums go thump thump thump... oh no wait.. that was my heart!!
ReplyDeleteA vivid 55, Eric!! Nicely done!
I think you could rap this one, eric. Hook up with brian cuz I think he's been hangin out at the open mic nights lately :)
ReplyDeletebtw, I have an award for you on my blog today, at http://sheila-moore.blogspot.com
have a super weekend!
I think you wrapped it just in time. Like . . before you started "pushing your luck"
ReplyDeleteahhhhh, i like it :)
ReplyDeleteWow! Sounds like you got more than the rhyming mastered! :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome rhythm and rhyme for 55 words! :) Love it!
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