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July 15, 2010

Oblivion

















A tickling at the back of the mind


A slow creeping notion,
or trickling old potion


Something stirring from deep slumber


Perceptions skewed
Facts misconstrued


A dimly realized lack of focus


Mental fingers grasp for knobs


Harsh light, no longer filtered gold


Everything disagrees
Nothing's born to please


Layers peeled back to bare bone


A force applied
The truth denied


No one noticed at all


Drifting in sweet Oblivion



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19 comments:

  1. the line about no one noticing...it got me...so sad. nice form though...enjoyed it...

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  2. Oh wow! Thanks for directing me hear. . . "the truth denied. . . " indeed.

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  3. I liked the line "mental fingers grasp for knobs"
    I'm like that when I wake in the night, I can't see without my contacts and I mentally stumble through the house. Nice imagery.....

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  4. If ignorance is bliss, what on earth is oblivion?!?!?!
    Loved this, Eric... I kinda drifted along with it... it's a good state to be in... (sigh)

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  5. I thank you Eric for sharing this with me. It is an awesome piece and somehow is related to my own! :)

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  6. An intriguing poem,something out of the ordinary

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  7. This piece lends a sense of something restful to be found in giving up earthly woes and relenting to the peace of "sweet oblivion".
    Wonderful poem and stunning photograph...

    Lynette

    http://imaginationlane.blogspot.com/2011/02/my-first-microfiction-monday.html

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  8. mental fingers..ghosts in allover your lines.
    creepy indeed.
    well done.

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  9. We all live such moments .. and some make it their life !

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  10. Oh ghostly passing without notice..mental fingers...oh my...bkm

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  11. Beautifully done. Almost puts me in a trance.

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  12. your piece was very captivating...I loved it. Stunning imagery as well...nicely done! xo

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  13. 'A dimly recognised lack of focus'..... you pinned-down the experience.

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  14. Interesting theme - and well explored.

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  15. Eric, this can happen sometimes and in my
    humble opinion, it isn't always a bad place to be:)

    Pamela

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  16. "mental fingers grasp for knobs..." love that image! Nicely done and a cool pic too!

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  17. Wow, I kind of did it similar to you~ I liked it
    Well Done~ Love the images that arrived and the photo sets the mood~

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  18. This is great and I really like the form. The form seems like ghostly floating..one line at a time. Just nuances speak louder than words sometimes.

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