A tickling at the back of the mind
A slow creeping notion,
or trickling old potion
Something stirring from deep slumber
Perceptions skewed
Facts misconstrued
A dimly realized lack of focus
Mental fingers grasp for knobs
Harsh light, no longer filtered gold
Everything disagrees
Nothing's born to please
Layers peeled back to bare bone
A force applied
The truth denied
No one noticed at all
Drifting in sweet Oblivion
**
We are all in sweet oblivion.
ReplyDeletethe line about no one noticing...it got me...so sad. nice form though...enjoyed it...
ReplyDeleteOh wow! Thanks for directing me hear. . . "the truth denied. . . " indeed.
ReplyDeleteI liked the line "mental fingers grasp for knobs"
ReplyDeleteI'm like that when I wake in the night, I can't see without my contacts and I mentally stumble through the house. Nice imagery.....
If ignorance is bliss, what on earth is oblivion?!?!?!
ReplyDeleteLoved this, Eric... I kinda drifted along with it... it's a good state to be in... (sigh)
I thank you Eric for sharing this with me. It is an awesome piece and somehow is related to my own! :)
ReplyDeleteAn intriguing poem,something out of the ordinary
ReplyDeleteThis piece lends a sense of something restful to be found in giving up earthly woes and relenting to the peace of "sweet oblivion".
ReplyDeleteWonderful poem and stunning photograph...
Lynette
http://imaginationlane.blogspot.com/2011/02/my-first-microfiction-monday.html
mental fingers..ghosts in allover your lines.
ReplyDeletecreepy indeed.
well done.
We all live such moments .. and some make it their life !
ReplyDeleteOh ghostly passing without notice..mental fingers...oh my...bkm
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done. Almost puts me in a trance.
ReplyDeleteyour piece was very captivating...I loved it. Stunning imagery as well...nicely done! xo
ReplyDelete'A dimly recognised lack of focus'..... you pinned-down the experience.
ReplyDeleteInteresting theme - and well explored.
ReplyDeleteEric, this can happen sometimes and in my
ReplyDeletehumble opinion, it isn't always a bad place to be:)
Pamela
"mental fingers grasp for knobs..." love that image! Nicely done and a cool pic too!
ReplyDeleteWow, I kind of did it similar to you~ I liked it
ReplyDeleteWell Done~ Love the images that arrived and the photo sets the mood~
This is great and I really like the form. The form seems like ghostly floating..one line at a time. Just nuances speak louder than words sometimes.
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