My love lightly through Eternity slips
Weightless though she carries the World
Six black horses hearken quick scarlet whips
Chariot crosses Heaven, her dark flags unfurled
Payment of bright stars, slowly her hand dips
The galaxies are stirred, swirling, tightly curled
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Beautiful!!!
ReplyDeleteah, but this speaks to my pagan soul...
ReplyDeletethank you -- it's lovely.
:)
This is the stuff, Eric. It's got everything I love about poetry in it, love, loss, eternity, mystery and that journeying thing...excellent rhymes as well. I can see the black banners waving in the star wind as she passes overhead. Nice.
ReplyDelete"chariot crosses heaven, her dark flags unfurled". Very beautiful images - I especially love her hand stirring the galaxies........absolutely wonderful.
ReplyDeleteoh...love how her hand dips swirling the universe...very nice eric...
ReplyDeletesmart, you got it on the math problem...
ReplyDeletelink to potluck today.
have fun!
Thanks for the support.
stunning imagery, well done.
ReplyDeletekeep it up!
A++
I really do love this Eric
ReplyDeleteYou are getting more romantic and kinda abstract
That's lovely Eric! Hardly what I would expect from a 'Bubba' lol. Thanks for you kind word on mine also.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words and pic.
ReplyDeleteA scarlet whip is a very striking image. Many striking ones in this, of course!
ReplyDeletePayment of bright stars. Awesome!
P.S. Check out my recent post -- something for YOU in it.
xo
Sweet!!! I didn’t even know I’d won because I can’t watch video content at work.
ReplyDelete(Glad I saw your comment and checked from home, Jannie!)
Great poem rich in words and imagery.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I love the imagery--the last line is just perfect.
ReplyDeleteInlove bright stars! A very well written poem, Eric!
ReplyDeleteYou have way with words, I like very much The galaxies are stirred, swirling, tightly curled, I can almost picture it, other worlds tangled, looking pretty. I got yesterday Chronicle of Amber will be reading it this weekend, thanks again for sharing the info with me! Have a good day!
ReplyDeletescentofmyheart - I'm looking forward to hearing what you think of Chronicles of Amber!
ReplyDeletenice! mine's here- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/
ReplyDeleteAward/Treats 4 Poetic Friends of Jingle, Happy Thursday!
ReplyDeletehappy Thursday!
a bit different than what I am used to reading from you...I really like the aire of mystery and illusion I felt...also a breath-taking photo
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