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November 5, 2010

Tents Know



As I walked past tents
What I said
Was past-tense

The things I put in my mouth
And what came out
Not peace, no

As I walked past, tense
What I said
was passed tense

The things I put in my brain
And what came out
Knot piece, know

As I walked, past tense
What I say
Is now, today

The things I put in my eyes
And what came out
Not piece, know

As I walked passed tents
What I say
Is now, today

The things I put in my veins
And what came out
Knot peace, no

9 comments:

  1. Love play on words 'tiz fun, Good one!

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  2. Eric,
    What a great play on words!
    Pamela

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  3. Very well written! I like a lot the rhymes!

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  4. WOW
    What a way to bring back those dark memories of the past..
    ;)

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  5. You are funny Eric. I love visiting your blog for the eclectic mix of poetry, verse and also reading the long questionaires and answers. Must comment once in a while though!

    Really just popping by to say thank you so much for the considered comment you made on my post yesterday. I appreciate that you took the time, and thought what you said was incredibly helpful and perceptive. Sometimes when you are in a situation you just can't see the wood for the trees I guess.

    xx Jos

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  6. I love this form of poem, I love your play with homonyms and word roots. this is a favorite meme for me when I want to get my neurons firing but as quickly and hot-wired as possible. You are terrific, not passe tints. Ha!
    I see what you see,
    Di

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  7. Fun and yet thought provoking.

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  8. Thanks everybody! I had fun with this one - it just popped into my head one morning.

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  9. Very interesting. Very enigmatic. Glad it popped into your head one morning, the quick ones are usually the best, like this one

    Peace is within they say. And sometimes within tents.

    xo

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