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May 10, 2010

I’m Here To Clean Up The Mess

(More of a country song than a poem.  Maybe someday I'll come up with a melody for it)


I can tell by the things you do
That someone made a mess of you
Broke your trust and your heart too
Left you in rough shape, it’s true


I’m here to clean up the mess
I’ll treat you better than the rest
Take a chance on me and then you’ll see
Put me to the test...
I’m here to clean up the mess


Listen girl, it ain’t no lie
I ain’t like that other guy
Give me a try and you’ll know why
I’ll warm your heart and make you sigh


I’m here to clean up the mess
I’ll treat you better than the rest
Take a chance on me and then you’ll see
Put me to the test...
I’m here to clean up the mess


So if you’re tired of feeling blue
Take a chance with someone new
We’ll go dance, have a beer or two
I’d be proud just to be with you


I’m here to clean up the mess
I’ll treat you better than the rest
Take a chance on me and then you’ll see
Put me to the test...
I’m here to clean up the mess

12 comments:

  1. Ramesh SoodOctober 25, 2010 at 7:50 AM

    What a beautiful attempt on bringing someone closer to you.. I think it ca turn out to be a good song.. must be humming already.. aint it.. Well done..

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  2. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 10:14 AM

    how i wish i can tell this and they believe haha!

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  3. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 10:39 AM

    Loved it, the repeat of the verses is like a chorus for a song. Put it to music????

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  4. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 11:41 AM

    Very sweet-- and you MUST put it to music!

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  5. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 25, 2010 at 1:54 PM

    I’m here to clean up the mess
    I’ll treat you better than the rest
    Take a chance on me and then you’ll see
    Put me to the test...
    I’m here to clean up the mess..


    you are a true romantic,
    Eric, she is lucky to have you ...

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  6. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 2:31 PM

    I wish there was someone with such beautiful words, to clean the mess for me when I needed it! Lovely!

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  7. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 3:40 PM

    So great! I loved this!

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  8. TeresaOctober 25, 2010 at 4:24 PM

    How sweet! There are so many out there that need someone to clean up the mess.

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  9. Chronicles in RedOctober 25, 2010 at 5:24 PM

    Worthy of a song in my mind this one my friend!!! Awesome xxx

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  10. eyeographyOctober 25, 2010 at 5:26 PM

    Amazing...a lovely romantic song...
    I love it... :)

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  11. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 9:49 PM

    A nice write! It's so much classier than my usual pick up line of "so, am I sexy enough for you or should I buy you another beer first?"

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  12. TALONOctober 25, 2010 at 11:54 PM

    This reads like a song. And who wouldn't love someone who's willing to clean up the mess?

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