Followers

May 10, 2010

Haunting You


I want to drift through your mind
   like the ghost of some old memory

I want to linger in your thoughts
   like an uninvited guest

I want to dwell in your subconscious
   a background sound forgotten

I want to make you reconsider
   all the sins you could commit

8 comments:

  1. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 11:42 AM

    Now that would be worthy of love-- nicely written!

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  2. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 12:07 PM

    Beginning each verse with "I want..." really does create a haunting effect. Nice, Eric.
    Victoria

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  3. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 25, 2010 at 1:56 PM

    wow,


    a romantic man you are,
    these words touch, heartfelt sentiments,
    skillfully done..
    cheers!

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  4. TeresaOctober 25, 2010 at 4:25 PM

    I just love this one--ghostly and romantic all at once! Nicely done.

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  5. eyeographyOctober 25, 2010 at 5:28 PM

    Wow...are you in love?
    Your poems are superb...

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  6. AnonymousOctober 25, 2010 at 9:51 PM

    Simple and overt yet perfectly pure in intent - great!

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  7. MarianJanuary 25, 2011 at 10:53 PM

    love this. do you want to encourage or discourage the committing of the sins? i'm hopeful for the former. ;)

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  8. BubbaJanuary 26, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    I purposely left that ambiguous, so readers would decide for themselves. (Consciously or otherwise)

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