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September 9, 2011

Thereness



Step
into the white
winter woods and
Stop

Feel
the stillness that
surrounds you there
Fall

Feel
the silent snow
the breathing trees
Full

Feel
your senses reach
expanding out
Fill

Stop
pondering and
wondering and
Step

21 comments:

  1. I was there in my otherness. xo

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  2. Very nice. I want to plunge into that season.

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  3. Lovely... as usual. I was just pondering the fact that i was your 1st or 2nd follower, and now look at you 141 strong and still expressing beautifully. thank you Bubba!

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  4. Enticing and meditative... much needed on this 9/11 anniversary. Thanks.

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  5. Beautiful poem. It's very meditative. I really like the structure.

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  6. I like the form of this and the final advice. How much do we miss by not taking that step!

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  7. Like the form, shows a lot of creativity along with your words. Refreshing!

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  8. Oh, I see what you did here! Just wonderful in concept and atmosphere.

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  9. opening with a stanza that commands your reader to stop makes me do precisely that. i was able to take this slowly, in small bites. to feel each line slide down my throat like a salve. thank you.

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  10. I love the repitition and the way it weaves it all together

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  11. This is wonderful. I felt myself take the deep breath with the reading and just feeling this poem. Beautiful!

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  12. Greetings:

    We are celebrating one year anniversary, wish to say thank you for the support in the past year, it would be a delight to have you share a piece of poetry with us today , any poems or Haiku, old or new are welcome…Please feel free to join us and get some feedback!

    You Deserve The Best!

    Bless your Monday!
    Cheers….
    Jingle Poetry Community

    xoxox

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  13. I like this very much Eric. Like the form, repetition and pattern you have here.

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  14. You’ve got superb talent in creative writing,
    Keep it up.

    Please check out short story slam week 10 prompt today.

    It is great to write and entertain our children,
    Don’t you agree?

    Give it a try,
    Let your beautiful imagination fly.

    Best.
    Happy Autumn!
    xoxox

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