I'm just a bad influence
I tempt you with lies
Not too hard to tell
Just look into my I's
You cannot resist me
That's no big surprise
Feel your heart quicken
And feel the heat rise
A kiss on your neck
A touch on your thighs
You think that I'm different
Not like other guys
But a thought is ticking
Behind those quick sighs
You're wondering now
Was this really so wise?
As lightning starts raging
Across leaden skies
heh. i see you.
ReplyDeleteWho, me? ;)
ReplyDeleteoh wow! My I's loved this!
ReplyDeleteI's glad they did, Neva!
ReplyDeletenot really that different eh? smiles.
ReplyDeleteNice! I've read through it a couple times. I like the wordplay with "Just look into my I's." Love it.
ReplyDeleteThose I's how could anyone resist you? And if you add the eyes... then, well!!!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem Eric...
Excellent wordplay in this, I's saying ;-)
ReplyDeleteWell I never....
ReplyDeletethat's not what I heard :)
Love how you got right to the heart of the matter in so few lines :-) Love it!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, is that you in the "shocking photos" thumbnail? LOL ...Great poem, Eric. Great build up in your poem; sounds hypnotic. The question at the end adds a whole other layer to it.
ReplyDeleteA excellent poem, Eric, with great word play.
ReplyDeletePamela
I like it, even if you men are all alike. (And now "you and your Spanish I's" is going through my head....sigh.
ReplyDeleteNice one shot, Eric.
so...you are the one my mother warned me about...mmm
ReplyDeletegreat one shot!
This is good - Rich! I enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great poem! I always loving stopping by here. Your poetry is always fresh and original.
ReplyDeleteAh the truth is out...Eric...life has it tempations...bkm
ReplyDeleteFabulously fun-- a romp! xxxJ
ReplyDeletehahaa! Loved this little tickle, I'm seeing someone special and a great poet lol x
ReplyDeleteLOL great wordplay and those I's. genius
ReplyDeleteSo hard to resist :)
Hi Eric
ReplyDeleteI liked the doubts that are making it presence felt after one is already taken a step forward...
'But a thought is ticking
Behind those quick sighs'
... I like the sensuality in the words too..
Thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html
ha - hope you are "delivered" with a warning sign...lol..great write eric
ReplyDeleteHaha, what a fun bit of rhyme. Love it!
ReplyDeleteNow this is REALLY something, Eric!! Have you read Anthony North's One Shot this week? If you haven't yet, DO IT!! I just read that before coming here... and now your poem makes me feel that the character in your poem and his are one and the same!
ReplyDeleteYou 'beguiling' conman!! :)
Enjoyed this well-rhymed piece!! :))
Eric,
ReplyDeleteI know this place... those thoughts
Fooled again!
a dynamic piece sir...
I dig it!
I was SO tickled by it..:D
ReplyDeleteransom
Good stuff! Nice rhyme...naughty image.
ReplyDeleteSolid work.
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