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January 13, 2011

The Gentle Snow


I watch it fall,

the gentle snow,

in friendly flakes

of white



It lightly drifts,

the gentle snow,

and piles-up

like delight



Walking through

the gentle snow

my feet,

they slowly plow



My toes ache in

the gentle snow

which seems

less friendly now


23 comments:

  1. oh that cold ache in my toes is very familiar- nice poem and I like the doggy paws ? in the snow photo

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  2. LOL! I've never seen that much snow in real life, but it makes my toes cold just seeing the photos. Thanks for the laugh.

    Blessings,
    Marion

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  3. smiles. yeah its all fun and games until you have to walk up hill both ways just to get somewhere...smiles.

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  4. haha... after reading just the first few lines... i thought 'friendly, huh?' and you nailed it on the head!

    :)

    Very "cute" if you don't mind me saying so.

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  5. cold causes pain. ice water is used as a "safe" test for pain threshold. nice.

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  6. Yeah - lovely to look at and horrible to actually deal with :)

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  7. The poem's lyrical. Good attention to detail of the poetic craft. I remember those cold Michigan winters, though I now live in Texas.

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  8. Hahaha - oh yes! I feel your pain!

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  9. Actually, a beautiful verse with the repeting line. If you decide to submit it for publication, leave off the last stanza.

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  10. lol good one! My feet always freeze too quickly.

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  11. Well Done, I love the lyrical tone~

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  12. Nice write! Funny how what is a positive thing at first has a negative turn toward the end. Nice repetition; and thanks for jamming!

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  13. I try to stay away from the white stuff as much as possible .. however we just got dumped on with more to come. The skiers love it! My toes and fingers DO NOT! A really neat poem, the repetition good.

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  14. bitten !.... a good piece of advice....snowetry

    Peace ☮

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  15. I especially like "piles up like delight".

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  16. Love it! The repetition works so well in this, as it echoes the snow that keeps coming and coming!

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  17. Where are your snow boots Eric?.....Love how you did this....a soft and wisful poem!

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  18. Ha! Made me laugh! Usually I'm complaining about the snow this time of year, but we haven't really had any to speak of & it's making me sad (& fearful of what summer may bring!).

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  19. Great use of the repeating line! I also love that twist at the end.

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