tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post3897814765116891103..comments2023-11-03T04:59:24.008-04:00Comments on Bubba's Place: Dark MachineBubbahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-2932787209999342832012-08-23T11:57:19.771-04:002012-08-23T11:57:19.771-04:00I have seen those dark machines...and sometimes I ...I have seen those dark machines...and sometimes I feel that I am turning into one ~ Enjoyed the visit ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-77042823917908602252012-08-23T02:14:55.139-04:002012-08-23T02:14:55.139-04:00My favorite part:
Labor-saving but still enslavin...My favorite part:<br /><br />Labor-saving but still enslaving<br />Beholden to an olden craving<br />For things which excite and delight<br />Misbehaving and beyond saving<br /><br />Also liked the ominous end stanza as well. An astute write!<br />Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-62096811724568063812012-08-22T23:26:05.023-04:002012-08-22T23:26:05.023-04:00You build the machine one cog at a time, until it ...You build the machine one cog at a time, until it becomes a gargantuan force of nature, a juggernaut that one cannot hope to slow or stop.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-82576884109646323502012-08-22T22:29:46.325-04:002012-08-22T22:29:46.325-04:00"Reliant upon suppliers and buyers
The ebbing..."Reliant upon suppliers and buyers<br />The ebbing and flowing of desires"<br /><br />Supply and demand, and it keeps on churning...<br />Like the rhyme and phrasing/word choices. Well penned.Ginny Brannanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15298060016652737538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-13029026320545911352012-08-22T22:06:00.101-04:002012-08-22T22:06:00.101-04:00Excellent, Eric. This reminds me of those sci-fi s...Excellent, Eric. This reminds me of those sci-fi storries where man's creation becomes so powerful, it realizes it can take over. We are dangerously close to making sci-fi a reality.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-57842615533492501312012-08-22T20:27:55.380-04:002012-08-22T20:27:55.380-04:00Eric, skillfully done. Excellent, smooth rhyming s...Eric, skillfully done. Excellent, smooth rhyming scheme. I agree with Brian's statement.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-84210803765088774912012-08-22T20:00:38.205-04:002012-08-22T20:00:38.205-04:00"the dark machine it never learns" the ..."the dark machine it never learns" the question is will we.<br /><br />I enjoyed the flow and rhyme. RMPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04054771419356465116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-28431275596637522882012-08-22T16:48:03.425-04:002012-08-22T16:48:03.425-04:00labor saving but still enslaving...you got that ri...labor saving but still enslaving...you got that right sir...this is the machine we created and now in many ways it has turned on us.....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-67786213161785043572012-08-22T16:12:58.522-04:002012-08-22T16:12:58.522-04:00True. All the elements of the dark machine listed ...True. All the elements of the dark machine listed here. And it still churns. Will we every be able to escape it in this life, before the one to come. <br /><br />A tight write, Eric. I really like the way you keep the mentioned elements compact. Each stanza has a message in and of itself. Your poem is pointed. It's not loose and loses the reader.<br /><br />I agree with Mama Zen, "Excellent write, Eric!"emmett wheatfallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07466994239329611740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2249823059195376824.post-17936483387850044272012-08-17T12:19:56.374-04:002012-08-17T12:19:56.374-04:00Excellent write, Eric!Excellent write, Eric!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.com